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Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 6:15 pm
by nina
They are really nice fluffy, I appreciate this
But do you think you could try to make the same rhythm?
example:
fnldkfndglkfdngklfdngkfdlhn red
nfgjldgkdnglfngkdfnhgfjlnkf dead
Jfhdfkldngkdlfgkbjfklnfgvfm scream
fcndsjklofndsgk,dsfndg,dfg dream
Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 6:26 pm
by fluffy
lol......yeah if you like.........lol.........
fluffy
Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 6:30 pm
by nina
thanks, it's just that the rest of the poem is in that rhythm, so it would be strange to suddenly change that. But I do really appreciate your wee verses, they're cute
Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 6:36 pm
by fluffy
People think autumn is sorrow in disguise
That everything's dying, but please give it a try
Cause behind the clouds the sky is always blue
So if you say autumn is sad, then saddest are you.
One year has past since the first leaf fell
And you might think life between that has been like a living hell.
You no longer know those you thought you knew
Because time is changing and you change too.
remember the sun will rise and welcome a new day,
As the wind blows all the leaves away.
You'll learn that darkness and sorrow aren't Autumn's all,
If you let yourself be embraced by the beauty of Fall.
The nights draw close, the air cools down
as Autumn spreads it's damp around.
Then Winter in it's frozen spell
will hold us in it's chilly hell.
But don't despair, as time rolls by
there's one thing makes us cheer and sigh.
Despite the long and darker nights
Soon Christmas will be in our sights.
fluffy
no probs Nina...............i tend to change the rhythm in my poems from time to time..........sorry.......lol
Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 6:42 pm
by cotton
Hey thats good Fluffs. Where did you steal that from?
Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 6:44 pm
by fluffy
Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 8:28 pm
by nina
Thanks a lot fluffy
Okay, the poem is finished then! I'm going to write it down to you, so you can see.
Autumn
People think Autumn is sorrow in disguise
That everything's dying, but please give it a try.
Cause behind the clouds the sky is always blue
So if you say Autumn is sad, then saddest are you.
One year has past since the first leaf fell
And you might think life between that has been like a burning hell.
You no longer know those you thought you knew
Because time is changing and you change too.
Remember the sun will rise and welcome a new day,
As the wind blows all the leaves away.
You'll learn that darkness and sorrow aren't Autumn's all,
If you let yourself be embraced by the beauty of Fall.
The nights draw close, the air cool down
As Autumn spreads it's damp around.
Then Winter in it's frozen spell
Will hold us in it's chilly hell.
But don't despair, as time rolls by
There's one thing that makes us cheer and sigh.
Despite the long and darker nights
Soon Christmas will be in our sights.
The Winter draws near and the nights are late
It's a season to love, a season to hate.
A season to love, a season to hate.
Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 9:02 pm
by Mia
Beautiful poem nina!
Fluffy and Laura are better at poetry than I am,
but sorry...I couldn't really think of anything that
seemed to fit with your poem.
Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 9:23 pm
by cotton
BRAVO Nina, Fluffy and Laura! Great Job!
Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 9:37 pm
by nina
I couldn't really think of anything that
seemed to fit with your poem
That's okay Mia. Maybe another time
I must thank you again Laura and fluffy, it is really nice of you to come up with that sort of stuff.
Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 9:42 pm
by fluffy
y/w........
fluffy
Posted: Wed Sep 27, 2006 1:15 am
by Laura Laing
you're welcome...it was fun getting the creative juices flowing again
Posted: Wed Sep 27, 2006 11:44 pm
by fluffy
crash and burn baby..............i'm feeling the burn.........deeper and deeper down...........best get some chocolate i guess........
fluffy
Posted: Thu Sep 28, 2006 12:28 am
by nina
*chocolate is on it's way to Scotland from Norway*
Whatever it is, I hope you feel better soon.
Posted: Thu Sep 28, 2006 12:39 am
by Mia
Me too.